Thanks for sending that report last week. Iread it yesterday, and I feel that Chapter 2 needs more specific informationabout our sales figures. I also felt that the tone could be more formal.
Also, I wanted to let you know that I'vescheduled a meeting with the PR department for this Friday regarding the new adcampaign. It's at 11:00 a.m. and will be in the small conference room.
Please let me know if you can make thattime.
Thanks!
Monica
Good example:
Subject: Revisions For Sales Report
Hi Jackie,
Thanks for sending that report last week. Iread it yesterday, and I feel that Chapter 2 needs more specific informationabout our sales figures.
I also felt that the tone could be moreformal.
Could you amend it with these comments inmind?
Thanks for your hard work on this!
Monica
(Monica then follows this up with aseparate email about the PR department meeting.)